Evaluation of Essay R

Essay R was written to provide the differences between professional wrestling in the past and present. The information itself is well researched, but the way the writer formed that information into the paper wasn't that good. I would give the paper a C- for the reasons that follow.
The writer probably should've read the Composition at Virginia Tech book before writing the paper. There are many punctuation errors, mostly consisting of the lack of commas. Many of the compound sentences do not have commas conjoining them like they are supposed to. Also, sequence words are supposed to have commas following them and the writer did not put these him. There are a few spelling mistakes which hinder my ability to read through the paper without noticing. The writer also could have used a broader range of vocabulary. The format of the paper wasn't very well organized. It kind of jumped from topic to topic making it a little bit hard to follow.
The writer also could have used a lot more sources. There were only three citations in the paper which seems like he didn't source everything that he researched.
Overall, I could tell that the writer was very passionate about his topic. It was quite informative but because of all the grammatical errors, it wasn't able to receive a grade that, with a little more effort, could have been received.